We are changing the name of our company, and are having brochures produced for resi and commercial. I was wondering if any of the kind folk here could comment on the info I plan on putting on my commercial brochure.

Ok, so here it goes! :

Results. Get it clean, Get it dry.

At Clean Carpets we pride our selves on providing superior
service with competitive prices. Our methods along with
state of the art equipment and detergents can deliver your
facility with Clean Carpets year round.

We like to address a commercial facilities' concerns by solving
them. Tiered of wet carpets in the morning? Carpets that wick
back dirt and spills days later after cleaning? Do you need your facility secured while we clean? Clean Carpets can do all this.

Traditional cleaning methods have a low percentage of success
when dealing with glued down commercial grade carpets, especially those that receive constant use. Here is how we can fix that:

1.Our detergents leave no sticky residue.
2.Our detergents contain built in fiber protection.
3.Our detergents require LESS water to activate.
4.Our machines SCRUB and EXTRACT.
5.Our machines are QUIET.

Imagine having a hallway cleaned, as you walk on it. Our detergents are not designed to “stick” to soil, rather they “trap” them. This is achieved by agitation, using fiber safe pads. These pads trap the emulsified soils, pulling them from your carpet.

Anything left behind is crystallized, and easily vacuumed the next day, however this is not even necessary. The residual polymers are 100% safe, do not re soil, and cannot become air borne.


A picture is worth a thousand words, but a demonstration is proof. Call us today to schedule a Free Demo of your troubled areas. Re occurring coffee spill? Dull traffic lane? Let us try to clean any 10 x 10 space in your office, church, hotel or any facility.

We are confident that not only will our processes deliver, they'll impress. We also offer free estimates, and cleaning package plans.

Our Pricing Is Competitive. Not happy with your current cleaner? Looking to put your facilty out to bid, but still want quality results? Clean Carpets has your solution!

Clean Carpets, your Carpet Cleaning Solution!


It may be a bit long, and I'll definately have the marketing girl space it just right with bullets and other fancy things.
Any input would be greatly appreciated!

Over all it sounds good.

I even like the new name for your business "Clean Carpets".
It's simple and it says what you provide!

I went ahead and took your draft and polished it up a little. What I did was a QUICK job. Obviously if I were really working it, I'd spend HOURS on it. But hopefully what I've added might be able to help you shape it a little further.


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We’ll get your carpet clean.
We’ll get it dry. We’ll do it right.
You have our word on it!

At CLEAN CARPETS we pride our selves on providing superior service at competitive prices. Our methods combine state of the art equipment and cleaning agents that can keep your facility looking its best all year round.

We like to address commercial facilities concerns by solving making sure that they don’t have any concerns. Tired of wet carpets in the morning? Tired of soil in the carpet that wicks back to the surface after the carpet is dry so that it looks even worse the day after it was cleaned? Are you struggling with frequent recurring spill stains? ? Do you need your facility to remain secure while it is being cleaned? Our company, CLEAN CARPES can do all this for you and more.

Traditional cleaning methods have a low percentage of success when dealing with glued down commercial grade carpets, especially those that receive constant use. Here is how we can fix that:

1. Our cleaning agents leave no sticky residue.
2. Our cleaning agents contain built in fiber protection.
3. Our cleaning agents require LESS water to activate.
4. Our cleaning equipment SCRUBS and EXTRACT the soil.
5. Our cleaning equipment is QUIET.

Imagine having a hallway cleaned, and at the same time you can walk on it. Our unique cleaning agents are not designed to “stick” to soil, rather they “trap” the soil. This is achieved by thorough agitation, using fiber safe pads. These pads trap the emulsified soil, pulling it from your carpet.

Any soil that may be left behind is then crystallized, and can be easily vacuumed the next day, or whenever you routinely vacuum the carpet. However this post vacuuming step is not required, since the carpets will look better than they ever have immediately following the cleaning. Our cleaning products are safe for the building occupants and the environment! And best of all, your carpets will stay cleaner longer since the polymeric structure of our cleaning agent actually resists resoiling.

We’ve all heard that a picture is worth a thousand words, but a demonstration is proof. I will back up everything I’ve stated above with a free demo on your most heavily soiled carpet so that you can see just how good your carpets can look. Call us today to schedule a Free Demo. Recurring coffee and soda spills? Dull traffic lanes? We will clean any 10 x 10 section of your commercial carpeting – I think you’ll be impressed!

package plans.

Our pricing is competitive too. And we even back up all our work with a total satisfaction guarantee! So if you’re not happy with your current cleaner, let us show you how we take the pain out of keeping commercial carpets looking great. It’s what we do. Your carpets will never look better! At CLEAN CARPETS we have the solution to all your commercial carpet care needs!


Sincerely,
CLEAN CARPETS


YOUR CARPET CLEANING SOLUTION












Rick Gelinas
rick@excellent-supply.com

It looks good I would add library quiet towards the end where you have quiet, creates a visual. Also I see no mention of Licensed-Insured-Certified if your not all 3 list the ones you have. Something I like to state is "commercial carpet is maunfactured differently than residential carpet and needs to be cleaned accordingly, we have invested in the latest technology to provide our customers with the maximum results"
Of course some before and after pictures to draw attention. If family owned and operated I would include "the owner will be on site providing services personally not an $8.00 per hour employee"

Find a problem rub salt in their wound and then give them the solution. Your Company and why you are different then everyone else out there. It boils down to needs and greeds and you need to find them. I know this needs to be a bit generic because of being a hand out,but I would call say 20 prospects or even companies you would rather not clean for and find out the 3 biggest headaches they have with cleaners plus the top 3 priorities for a winning bid on cleaning floor coverings.

After you have done that it will be easier to write something that will get the attention of the targeted audiance

Thanks guys, great advice. I will definately be tweaking this for the next week before it is final.

David, have you tried the approach you mentioned? Was it difficult to get them to chat? That is definately a good "out side the box" idea.


Thanks again

Yes I have done this, once you get the decision maker on the phone asked the right questions to find out what they are looking for is easy when you pose the questions correctly.

This does two things let you know exactly what they are looking for cheap price, quality job, or some where in between.
It also save me from running around doing demos to those who do not qualify are my target, saving me from wasting my time by doing a demo only to find out later they have gone with a cheaper service or someone who had and in.


There is more to the process then that obviously but that is it in a capsol.

Awsome, thank you